A song by Iomen

Heres one of my poems/ songs its all in all pretty dark but I like writing tell me what u guys think.

Forsaken

　
Why can't i see you in my dreams
I've saw you every night before
Now i'm in the dark so cold
Set me free and forsaken me
For theres no point in this no more
We have made wounds that can not heal
Just set me free and forsaken me
I see you standing there right in front of me
Looking down bleeding eternaly
Shivering cold and incomplete
Will someone just set me free
Set me free and forsaken me
For theres no point in this no more
we have made wounds that can not heal
Just set me free and forsaken me
I told you to believe in me
To hold my hand and follow me
But you wandered amilessly
away from me
cant you see
this is not worth it anymore
We have both become so cold
Set me free and forsaken me
For theres no point in this no more
We have made wounds that can not heal
Just set me free and forsaken me
Wake me up, Set me free and forsaken me
Wake me up, Set me free and forsaken me
Wake me up, Set me free and forsaken me
Wake me up and set me free
Set me free and forsaken me
For theres no point in this no more
We have made wounds that cannot heal
We have both become so cold
Just forsaken me

Well wanted to know if it would be good for a melodic metal song. Comment on it

Hey, neat!